Peer Review on Mun Teng's WA2

To start off, I find that your sentences in the introduction do not flow smoothly. Maybe you would like to alter the sentence structure such as reducing the number of example you gave in the first sentence and also the choice of words in the following two sentences. In addition, I think that you should add in a brief explanation on how the injection of sulfur particles into the stratosphere can help to combat climate change in your introduction. Besides that, I believe the injection of sulfur particles is a geoengineering technique instead of bioengineering.

Are the terms “stratosphere modification scheme” and “albedo scheme” refers to the same thing? If it is, I think you should just use one of it as it might be confusing for those who are not knowledgeable in this field. Since in your introduction, you mentioned the keywords “sulfur injection” and “stratosphere’, it will be more appropriate if you use the term stratosphere modification scheme. However, I feel that the examples you gave does support your arguments well.

Overall, I think that your essay is coherent and well organized. You made good use of transition words throughout the essay. However, there is error with your reference list alignment. You may want to refer to http://www.lib.nus.edu.sg/lion/s/citeapa.html for some examples. By the way, do not forget to use 1.5 line spacing as mentioned in the EG1471 style sheet. I hope that with my review is helpful to provide you some guideline to improve your essay. Anyway, good effort!

Peer Review on Yoke Shyng's WA1

To start off, your introduction is quite interesting. However, you might want to state your thesis in the introduction.

For the first body paragraph, I feel that you gave good and strong supporting details for your topic sentence. It logically shows that natural ecosystem can help to be use as a protection against natural disaster.

In body paragraph two, maybe you should try to explain how the countries under REDD program can benefit while conserving their forest because I think the name of the program does not really tells us much on how it can support the topic sentence.

In body paragraph three, you should try to explain how biofuels can help to reduce emission of greenhouse gases as some readers might not know what it is. I do not think that the information about the amount of carbon that can be remove by oceans and reducing deforestation supports the topic sentence.

Your conclusion has a smooth transition with good use of transition words and your brief summary suites your main points stated in your body paragraphs.

Overall, I think that your essay is coherent and you made good use of transition words throughout the essay. However, there are some citations missing in your reference. As what I have pointed out above, there is still room for improvement for your essay.

Climate Change: Response

Assistant professor, Dr. Sovacool presented about the response to climate change by both institutional and individual. He focused more on the solutions for sectors involving energy supply and usage as it is the main cause of greenhouse gas emission.

Institutional actions for climate stabilization are actions by the governments, cabinets and congress to solve climate change. To control the energy supply, they can reduce the subsidies for fossil fuel and giving subsidies to clean energy producers. They can also limit the number of cars on the road by implementing taxes and fees on purchase of vehicles. Besides that, limiting number of driving days and encourage the use of public transport facilities or non-motorized forms of transport can reduce the amount of greenhouse gas emissions. He also mentions several other methods that can be implement in sectors such as buildings, industries, agricultures and waste management.

As for what individuals can do, they can eat locally grown food and reduce the amount of meat they consume. Besides that, they can reduce the use of energy at home by using energy saving products and not to waste energy usage unnecessary. In addition, one can practice a more environmentally friendly lifestyle such as reuse, reduce, and recycle of materials that would cause pollution to the environment.

In conclusion, institutions can regulate the laws but it is still up to the individuals to make the difference by educating themselves and others to take actions to solve the climate change issues.

Self Introduction

Good day. My name is Chi Ming. I am a second year Mechanical Engineering student at the National University of Singapore. I was born at Klang, Malaysia. I moved to Singapore at the age of 18 to pursue my studies in the Diploma in Mechatronics at Singapore Polytechnic . Besides studying, I work as a part time barista in a cafe.